Monday 23 May 2016

Writing - Short story

Blog Post Title - My Short Story

For this piece of writing I have focusing on my vocabulary and punctuation. I have been learning to: - use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning (Year ⅞)

The pieces of my writing that are highlighted green are where I have shown my vocabulary and punctuation goal

My Story: Agent Shade 

“No… I'm sorry you're just not worthy enough to join my agency” I said


“Can you please leave and never return Mr Stephens” said my secretary with a very stern voice  As he left, I went to the coffee machine and made me and my secretary (Miss Sprightly) a cup of coffee.


“Here you go” I said as I handed the cup to her.


“Thanks, so ma'am…” she continued
“I've got a few more files for some missions should we hand them to The Best?”
The Best is short for Brittany Ethan Simple-Ton. The Best is the best, she's an amazing spy, she's good at going undercover and she's amazing but she's not as good as me… I mean i'm not trying to brag but I was the creator of this amazing spy agency and I was the one to find her.


“So.. Um Sprightly, I was thinking…”  I said while looking through the files


“Maybe we could handover these files to The Best” I said while handing the files to her “But couldn't possibly I get this file handed over to me?” I asked as I handed the cardboard colored file to he


“But ma'am…”


“Please, I cut her off, I beg you, everyday I'm stuck in this amazing mansion with nothing to do but play games on my devices”


“Hmmm…” she thinks


“Ok”


“Yesss!” I scream in my head


*Knock *Knock
“Come in”
It was The Best.


“Ma'am, you called me?”


“Yes I would like to hand over these three files, this one is the case of the missing diamond necklace, I say as I hand her the file, this one is about the girl who lost her teddy bear and this one is the file that I talked to you about earlier where one of the elderly lost her dentures” I gave her all three files and she took them but she didn’t leave.


“Is that all?”  
She asked


“Um… Yeah were you expecting something else?”
The Best wasn’t acting as normal as she should be.


“Oh I was wondering if there were any other files or…. Like that one case that you mentioned about the fridge robber”


“When did you find out about that?”
Something wasn’t right, I never told The Best anything about a case like that.


“We don’t even have a case like that Agent Brittany, please say the truth you haven’t been, you know, snooping around my office, have you now?”
I strictly asked her, I didn’t expect her to do such a thing, and I didn’t expect myself to ask such a question to Agent Brittany.


“No ma’am I didn’t mean to hurt you I just thought we would have the file because everyone was talking about it and it’s in the paper too”
Hmmmm I don’t know if I can trust her.


“It’s ok, but since you asked I’ll tell you anyway, so we have received the opportunity to take over this case but I didn’t want anyone to handle it this time, instead I wanted to handle the case myself”
I think I said that in an overconfident voice. After that The Best left and I scanned the file. I read and read and in about 2 hours I thought it was time for a break.


I went home and as I walked to my door I realised that the door was open, my fridge was open and had nothing in it, crumbs everywhere. It was the fridge robber! Now I have to go to the grocery store and get some more food.


At the grocery store I got my items, all the things I need, especially passion fruit. I have a “passion” for passion fruit. I headed over to the counter, got my things, payed the appropriate amount and left.


As I drive past I see a black figure it’s the same black figure that was in the file, that must’ve been the same person who robbed my fridge! Yes I have figured it out, well at least I think I have. I quickly parked my car in the driveway and scurried into my house.


I took, photos, videos, everything to get multiple evidence so I can show a presentation with all the crime scene footage. I got back into my car and head to HQ.


At HQ I showed the presentation to my secretary and then we took it to the police. We managed to get them to team up with us and we went on a hunt to find the person, The Fridge Robber.
We searched and searched but we didn’t find any clues or anything about the person. So we decided to give up. I started to head home, at least I had a full fridge to cook with.


I walk into my house seeing a light coming from the kitchen, I go have a look and find the black figure right there in action eating my food. I act fast and take their hoodie off. They turn around and I just felt like I had a heart attack right then and there. It was The Best, she was the criminal all this time, she wanted to “handle” the case so no one finds out! What a cheeky little criminal.


“Um Ma’am.. I was just making sure you had enough.. um … passion fruit!”


“Really what about all the other fridges that you have robbed?”


“ uhhhhhh..”


“Come with me” I took her to the HQ and presented all the evidence and the criminal. We sent her somewhere she belongs, prison.


“CASE CLOSED!” yelled the judge in the court. Everyone was so happy the criminal was caught and everyone got their food back. And guess who payed? The Best, because she is the best criminal, spy and “person”.


BY JESSICA  

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